Allia
Posts : 5 Join date : 2013-10-09 Age : 29 Location : Who knows.
| Subject: Allia, Essence pack Wed Oct 09, 2013 11:50 pm | |
| Name: Allia Gender: Female Breed: Artic wolf Age: 2 years Arrived Here: Winter Coat Color: White Eye Color: Amber Scars/Deformaties/Disabilities: None. Desired Pack or Rogue: Essence Pack Desired Rank: Guardian Photo: Personality: Allia is a smart younger wolf that is nearly as swift as she is cunning. She can often come up with a quick and easy way to deal with the task she has been dealt. Her humor is either sarcastic or gentle teasing. Over all she is a good natured wolf that loves to be around her pack mates and gets along with most if not all of them with ease. Despite all of this she tends to be quiet and seem shy but once you are considered a friend to her its almost as if you have meet someone completely different. Example Post: As the dim glowing light emited from that of the moon ,which rose above the deserted lands, where a creamy white she-wolf traveled endlessly in her pursuit for a pack, she paused for a brief moment. The scents of other canines and their packs were growing with each paw step, she took as she moved forward. Without warning the white pelted vixen silently, due to her slow and cautious movements, treaded on as she curiously headed deeper into the territory. Her dirt stained paws lightly touched the earth an almost eerie feeling flooded over her. This area of land felt almost strangely familiar to her. Of course, this was near the place where she had been attacked by two blood thirsty mongrels; that left her battered, bleeding, and wounded. Guilt, anger, and fear spread itself over her features as she pressed on, quickening her pace.The pircing howls of a younger wolf, probably that of a pup, taunted her mind in agony as the flashbacks of old memories came to mind. Secret Word: The correct Secret Word has been provided and has been removed to maintain a safe joining for future members ~Delta Achak
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Delta Achak
Posts : 30 Join date : 2013-10-05
| Subject: Re: Allia, Essence pack Wed Oct 09, 2013 11:58 pm | |
| Unfortunately, and I hate to be so specific, but there are only 7 sentences in your Example Post, where there most be 8. And the word count is a minimum of 150, while your Example Post is only 114. Please correct these errors, and then you will be free to post at the border to be accepted by your new Alphess!
~Delta Achak | |
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Allia
Posts : 5 Join date : 2013-10-09 Age : 29 Location : Who knows.
| Subject: Re: Allia, Essence pack Thu Oct 10, 2013 12:14 am | |
| Okay, should be all done now. | |
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Delta Achak
Posts : 30 Join date : 2013-10-05
| Subject: Re: Allia, Essence pack Thu Oct 10, 2013 12:17 am | |
| Congratulations! Your profile has been accepted, and you may now post at the Essence Border to be accepted.
~Delta Achak | |
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